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Post by Castle Court Jester on Oct 12, 2023 1:27:20 GMT -6
“Perfect Poem”
What do you want from me?
You want me to write you down
so you can be free eternally?
I will write you down
as you come to mind
and I will experience your power
in so doing I will find.
But it seems I am never quite satisfied.
It is never enough.
In writing you down
I am lacking that “stuff.”
The perfect poem.
I will never reach that goal.
Though you and I try
on many occasions
it is futile
and we both know it.
We have written some good ones
and some bad.
Some have been happy ones.
Some quite sad.
And though I will never stop striving
to write that “perfect you”
I do not expect to ever know a time
when you will come shining through.
Perfect poem just hear my call
and know that I am once again
trying to write of you although I know
I am doing so in vain.
Then when we walk within your worlds,
whatever in writing we discover
that we shall never know a place
such as this in any other.
--msl2023
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Post by Catlady2710 on Oct 12, 2023 10:33:11 GMT -6
You have just written the perfect poem.
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Post by Castle Court Jester on Oct 13, 2023 23:44:42 GMT -6
HUGS Ty Cat, you give me too much praise though but it is much appreciated.
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Post by goldenmyst on Oct 14, 2023 0:51:36 GMT -6
Michael, you weave language into the perfect ode to the quest for the perfect poem. And this poem is the essence of a truly gifted poetic envisioning of that quest.\
John
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Post by Castle Court Jester on Oct 14, 2023 22:59:51 GMT -6
Thank you my friend Looking forward to hopefully reading more of your work too.
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Post by AquarianM on Nov 11, 2023 17:36:57 GMT -6
I don't there ever will be "the perfect poem." Although everything in the universe can fit within the lines of a poem as I once said many years ago, trying to stuff it all in is the work of lifetimes, plural. You got a pretty good shot at it here, but don't lay down your pen for too long, poet.
Dan
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Post by Castle Court Jester on Nov 15, 2023 1:14:47 GMT -6
Never my friend Don't you lay your pen down for too long either
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