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Post by Deleted on Dec 15, 2022 2:51:19 GMT -6
Lullaby
Blue waves crawl ashore.
Body resting underneath
shall be held no more.
--msl2022
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Post by Catlady2710 on Dec 15, 2022 12:25:53 GMT -6
Right up there with "Rock-a-bye baby on the tree top. When the wind blows, the cradle will rock, and down will come baby, cradle and all"
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Dec 18, 2022 0:55:53 GMT -6
Post by Deleted on Dec 18, 2022 0:55:53 GMT -6
ty Cat glad you enjoyed
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Post by goldenmyst on Dec 18, 2022 14:56:39 GMT -6
Michael, this is a surreally beautiful and darkly penned poem that sings to my heart. You took the child's lullaby and made it into your own song for adults. Finely etched my friend. Loved the ocean wave metaphor that really served your purpose wonderfully.
John
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Post by Deleted on Dec 19, 2022 1:27:14 GMT -6
ty my friend glad you enjoyed
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Post by QueenFoxy on Dec 25, 2022 23:35:11 GMT -6
Darkly interesting, Michael.
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Post by oldarmybear on Dec 26, 2022 10:37:26 GMT -6
I agree it is darkly macabre
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Post by Deleted on Dec 28, 2022 1:53:54 GMT -6
I also post on Vocal..This is a haiku I entered in their "Blue Haiku" contest where you have to write the haiku about something "blue." Maybe I'll win, who knows. Worth a shot. glad you all enjoyed
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Post by Brian on Jan 18, 2023 6:05:29 GMT -6
Powerfully written. Not easy to do using this form. Neatly done Michael.
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Post by Castle Court Jester on Mar 18, 2023 2:07:34 GMT -6
Ty all
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Post by Sugarmuser on Mar 28, 2023 14:47:19 GMT -6
He is off to sleep, nice dark tone
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Mar 29, 2023 23:55:10 GMT -6
Post by Castle Court Jester on Mar 29, 2023 23:55:10 GMT -6
Ty
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Post by Sugarmuser on Apr 5, 2023 16:48:10 GMT -6
Reminds me of Ophelia
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Post by Castle Court Jester on Apr 5, 2023 18:02:30 GMT -6
Wow! Ty
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