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Post by goldenmyst on Jun 26, 2020 20:35:41 GMT -6
Nuevo Laredo
Wife’s Bodhisattva halo embraces the nativity of a Mesoamerican Madonna holding her baby in a circle of love. Beatified in luminescence Ascetic body lost to hunger Golden daughter of creation whose son shines Like the gold-leafed pages In her book of divine love His nursery rhyme eyes Are a shanty-town of tears Mother’s milk-less breasts grieve In prophetic yearning for son’s rebirth My beloved’s heartbeats are a pulsar As her soul synchronizes With the celestial harmony Of maternal love eternal Blue sky clarity crystallizes The buffalo nickel wife carries for luck Becomes Mama’s thousand dollar gift She kisses their earthen faces Under the light of a thousand suns
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Post by QueenFoxy on Jun 27, 2020 11:51:46 GMT -6
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Post by goldenmyst on Jun 27, 2020 15:49:10 GMT -6
Thanks, Foxy. I did a major rewrite on this one. Now it has that poetic shine all poems need.
XoXoXo John
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Post by lostineternity99 on Jun 28, 2020 6:22:12 GMT -6
John - I read the original poem first and agree this version is greatly enhanced poetically; like a wondrous butterfly spawned from its cocoon
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Post by goldenmyst on Jun 28, 2020 6:34:03 GMT -6
Thank you from my heart Rick my friend. I love the metaphor of the butterfly that emerged from its cocoon. That is the perfect comparison. Indeed it is practically a whole new poem. John
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Post by Catlady2710 on Jun 28, 2020 12:17:44 GMT -6
Beautiful
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Post by goldenmyst on Jun 28, 2020 12:30:17 GMT -6
Thank you so much Cat. My wife was an angel among us and no doubt is watching over us.from heaven.
John
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Post by QueenFoxy on Jun 29, 2020 11:48:54 GMT -6
So very like a butterfly.
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Post by goldenmyst on Jun 29, 2020 12:38:12 GMT -6
Gorgeous and awe inspiring tag my friend. Chrysalis is what happened with this poem. My forlorn caterpillar sprouted wings., XoXoXo John
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Post by QueenFoxy on Jul 2, 2020 18:25:50 GMT -6
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Post by goldenmyst on Jul 2, 2020 23:26:59 GMT -6
Thank you so much, Foxy for the inspiring uplifting words and image. Your piece of wisdom is perfect for me on this lonely night.
XoXoXo John
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Post by Deleted on Jul 4, 2020 1:19:47 GMT -6
Great work John! I liked it before too but yes, this is even greater! Enjoyed Happy 4th
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Post by goldenmyst on Jul 5, 2020 15:35:52 GMT -6
Thanks a million, Michael! Yes, I think the earlier one was like the seed whereas this is the blossomed flower.
John
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Post by QueenFoxy on Jul 9, 2020 14:13:05 GMT -6
Cool analysis, John.
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Post by poetinpink on Jul 14, 2020 21:00:21 GMT -6
~John~ Wonderful read my friend You know I have always loved the way you implement your magical metaphors You are a master painter with word art Huggerz Alana
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Post by goldenmyst on Jul 14, 2020 23:12:58 GMT -6
Thanks so much, Alana. Your comments carry your rainbow smile through your words. You are the light of heaven.
Hugs, John
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Post by QueenFoxy on Jul 15, 2020 10:49:26 GMT -6
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Post by goldenmyst on Jul 16, 2020 16:07:35 GMT -6
Love your tag, Foxy. The magic kingdom is where it is happening. Party hearty.
XoXoXo John
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