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Post by augustsky on May 1, 2019 20:43:04 GMT -6
'All the Way to Heaven'~
"I want to find me a carnival Outside of town A tilt-a-whirl set up With a merry-go-round Cotton candy fingers And a snow-cone mouth, I want to roll you in sawdust Till they run us both out, All the way to heaven.. All the way"..
Night breeze blowin' between us Down a ribbon road, I want the all of you.. To taste your shadow Upon my lips, and You want to free the heaven in me.
Travel me down through carefree hollow Where owls call to their mates and loons chant to lovers. Past Testify-tree Where old wounds are hung out to dry, Uncertainty tossed to the ditch.
We'll race towards a gaping sky Swallowed by its sunset blessing, There you'll give to me a shawl of stars, Cold no more I'll be.. You've brought out the heaven in me, All the way to heaven, All the way..
©Augustsky
*Verse in quotation from "All the Way to Heaven" By: Melissa Etheridge
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Post by Deleted on May 2, 2019 2:22:18 GMT -6
Well ok then! I'm game How energetic a read is this? It really comes through this way! Cool stuff! You literally pump the reader up here! What a rush! When I was a wee Mikey many, many moons ago I used to work at a really dump of an amusement park called Joyland in the booming town of Tapuka...i mean, Topeka, Kansas. Was my first real job. 3 dollars per hour, lol! Was minimum wage then! That shows my age! Place was a dump though, owner was cheap as hell. You literally prayed to God that no one would die on the ride you were operating because they were so unkept..falling apart. Eventually the place was shut down because of safety risks. Anyway, beer's talking again! What I was getting at was that one of the rides I used to run the most was the Tilt-a-whirl. You took me back with this one Crazy as the place was...how much of a dump the place was....man...good times...good times.....This one time! No..listen...get back here...(grabs ya)..this one time when I was running the tilt-a-whirl this kid puked up thi...?? What Foxy?...hold on...O...ok...Foxy says I gotta cut it short..can't imagine why...was just gettin' to the good part and all....O well....Hey, cool read
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Post by lostineternity99 on May 2, 2019 5:16:39 GMT -6
Hey Sky, you have expounded on the Melissa Etheridge song lyrics with beautiful, stylish verses and your trademark wondrous imagery *five paradisiacal stars*
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Post by Catlady2710 on May 2, 2019 13:42:52 GMT -6
Nicely done
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Post by QueenFoxy on May 2, 2019 18:31:22 GMT -6
I gotta tell you guys, I used to love all those wild and crazy carnival rides, but my favorite always was and still is the tilt a whirl. Great poem, Sky. Brings back memories.
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Post by AquarianM on May 3, 2019 0:13:21 GMT -6
Beautiful. I can't believe I've never seen a tilt-a-whirl in poetry before in all these years. That was my favorite ride as a kid.
Dan
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Post by eezebard on May 3, 2019 6:19:58 GMT -6
Enjoyed the read and could feel the excitement. Tilt-a-Whirl... perhaps at one time but today I think I’m more a boat captain sitting in one of those little boats going around to no-where as I ring the little bell.
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Post by Bri on May 13, 2019 13:51:30 GMT -6
“Past Testify-tree Where old wounds are hung out to dry, Uncertainty tossed to the ditch“
I love the freedom of that, makes this feller ~sigh~ in a dream of such a happy place that must be 👏 B~
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Post by pcurtis739 on May 13, 2019 16:36:20 GMT -6
I'd puke every time, and wasn't any good the rest of the night. That aside, the way you rolled this out is inspiring. This is what writing is all about.
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Post by Deleted on May 14, 2019 2:16:04 GMT -6
you all may have enjoyed riding them but i was one of the poor unfortunate souls who operated it and had to clean up everyone's puke
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Post by Deleted on May 14, 2019 2:17:15 GMT -6
good chance i may have cleaned up Curtis's
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Post by augustsky on May 19, 2019 23:18:52 GMT -6
Ok..Enough up-chucking in here already! lol Many thanks..Michael, Rick, Cat, Foxy, Dan, Rex, B, & Curtis. Attachment DeletedSky~
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