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Post by lostineternity99 on Jul 26, 2018 6:39:03 GMT -6
 The loneliest star is keenly seen
in my own painted night sky scene;
though dim to others, to me she glows
for I identify with what she knows.
No personal planet is hers to claim
or even a comet to blaze her name;
she wonders why this must be so
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I swear her tears, to me she shows.
Sometimes it is more than I can bear
to see her glow, knowing no one cares;
wishing I could release her sorrow
if only a spaceship, I could borrow.
Last night my special loneliest star
disappeared, leaving an enduring scar
in my heart for I know she imploded...
all hope for love having been eroded.
No longer do I gaze up at the night sky
for the fable of its glory is all a lie;
stars were never meant to shine alone
and neither was I ... her death was my own.
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Post by Brian on Jul 27, 2018 1:22:32 GMT -6
Rick, I love the flow and rhythm in this. It soft roll fits with the reflection of the spirit that mirrors the star on its own.
It aches in increments like a sharp needle slowly breaking the skin.
The close brought to mind a line from the poem by Walter de la Mare, The Listeners.
"and how the silence surged softly backward,"
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Post by lostineternity99 on Jul 27, 2018 6:48:34 GMT -6
I appreciate knowing you love the flow and rhythm to my poem, Brian. Your praise is most poetic! It is so nice my words reminded you of such a sublime line from that classic poem, thank you  |
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Post by QueenFoxy on Jul 27, 2018 12:45:03 GMT -6
This is so very beautiful, Rick. So much emotion.  |
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Post by lostineternity99 on Jul 28, 2018 9:15:00 GMT -6
Thank you very much, Foxy; I like the poetry graphic you posted  |
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Post by AquarianM on Aug 4, 2018 2:34:43 GMT -6
Beautiful. I was looking low in the sky to the North at 1am this morning as I was having my Friday cigar (Just one per week, ever) and I saw a star all by itself, and into my head popped "The lonely star..." I have no idea why. Then I came into the forum and read this. I think we poets tune into a similar wavelength fairly often. It's in the nature of where our art comes from.
Dan
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Post by lostineternity99 on Aug 4, 2018 7:02:35 GMT -6
Thank you and also for the timing of your seeing the lonely star! We poets definitely share the same wavelength, Dan.
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Post by QueenFoxy on Aug 4, 2018 16:43:49 GMT -6
I think there is definitely a connection, dear poets.  |
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Post by goldenmyst on Aug 4, 2018 20:38:41 GMT -6
Rick this is one of your most hauntingly beautiful creations. Your metaphor of this star all by itself is truly original and moving. I can identify with the loneliness of this star as I'm sure others can. You are a master of imaginative poetry whose words enchant.
John
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Post by lostineternity99 on Aug 5, 2018 6:48:32 GMT -6
I think there is definitely a connection, dear poets. Yes yes   |
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Post by lostineternity99 on Aug 5, 2018 6:51:19 GMT -6
Rick this is one of your most hauntingly beautiful creations. Your metaphor of this star all by itself is truly original and moving. I can identify with the loneliness of this star as I'm sure others can. You are a master of imaginative poetry whose words enchant. John Your high compliments are especially appreciated as this is a personal favorite, John; thank you so very much! It is always great when readers identify with my written thoughts ... even dark or sad ones. |
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Post by simpledip on Aug 8, 2018 9:51:26 GMT -6
it is in the
pain of parting
we learn the truth -
it is not the body nor the mind
but something else, illusive but real
that brings the truth
of our life -
love has no
beginning nor an end.
Bows deeply
~Dip
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Post by lostineternity99 on Aug 17, 2018 6:51:38 GMT -6
Yes, absolutely that is true ... thank you, and for sharing your profound thoughts.
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Post by alexis on Aug 28, 2018 23:00:47 GMT -6
*tears*
i have missed your words..........*soft hugs*
alexis
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Post by lostineternity99 on Aug 29, 2018 6:14:18 GMT -6
Hi Alexis,
Thank you ... i have missed your poetry too and look very much forward to reading them here (((hugs))) |
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Post by QueenFoxy on Aug 31, 2018 7:55:40 GMT -6
And we are all happy to have you here Alexis.  |
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